Would like some feedback

[jumpymonkey]

Hey everyone, I did this video a while back, but the worship pastor at my church has asked me to start doing some more. I just wanted to let you all see this to see what I can improve on for my next video. It's basically just a video depicting the lyrics of this song by BarlowGirl. So, any criticism would be great, thanks.

She Walked Away

[uconcept]

Great message. At some areas I would add some slow motion, like when she is in her room and the 'wind' is blowing (as it is, it seem like a fan is blowing at her face). Also at the end when she is waking and you added the blur. I think making it even slower would be effective here too.